Yes, You Definitely Need Feedback On Your PTE Writing Practice!

When it comes to PTE writing practice, teacher feedback is almost always necessary. Otherwise, you will be left to guess whether or not your writing will make the cut for the PTE writing section, and you won’t have a clear sense of how and where to improve. 

When you purchase two tutorials or more packages with E2Language, you are entitled to three or more written feedback reports on both writing and speaking tasks. That is, at least three writing and three speaking tasks. The more tutorials you book, the more tasks you can submit for feedback.

The quality feedback on your PTE writing practice will enable you to improve with each writing task. Having your errors identified means that you can correct them and not make the same errors in your next piece of writing. This process of:

learn –> do –> get feedback –> learn –> do –> get feedback

This the teaching model that creates E2Language PTE success stories.

Learn: about the methods in the live classes and recorded webinars

Do: The practice tasks on the E2Language website

Get Feedback: In the one-to-one tutorials and from teacher written feedback on your assessment submissions.

Below are some sample PTE Writing practice assessments submitted by real students and assessed by real teachers.  Read carefully; you might recognize your own level of skill!

PTE Writing Practice: Summarize Written Text

Submission #1: 

Score: 25/90

Ice is formed from “firn” material by close off the air pores of grainy substance and under continuous pressure some ‘firn’ depth is squeezed into ice that depth is range from few meter to 100m.

Teacher Feedback:

Ice is formed from “firn” (-material) by clos(ing) off the air pores of grainy substance(s)(,) and under continuous pressure(,) some ‘firn’ depth is squeezed into ice (at a depth of) few meter(s) to 100m.

Unfortunately, you managed to make repeated formatting and spelling/grammar errors which together reduced your score significantly. I have reduced the score for content and structure as it is difficult to understand what you are describing. For example, you can say ‘firn’ or ‘material’ but it is not quite understandable when you say ‘firn material’. I also noticed you have some errors with verb-noun agreement.

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Submission #2

Score: 54/90

A team of scientist have concluded that as the snow accumulate and gets compressed, the air gets trapped in them and that the gas age -ice age may differ by hundreds of years.

Teacher Feedback:

You’ve covered some of the text’s important elements and how they relate. That’s good.

Grammar:

a team of scientist (should be >>) a team of scientists

as the snow accumulate (should be >>) as the snow accumulates

The following is a good approach to writing a one-sentence summary of a text.

1) Start with a simple sentence that covers a major point:

Antarctic ice sheets survive summer.

2) Then insert another point to your sentence using a relative clause:

Antarctic ice sheets, which are typically created at a depth of 100 metres from compressed, buried snow, survive summer.

3) Finally, you can add another point using ‘and…’:

Antarctic ice sheets, which are typically created at a depth of 100 metres from compressed, buried snow, survive summer and ensure temperatures in surrounding areas do not rise much above freezing.

Make sure that you look at the E2Language  core skills videos .

You’ll see videos on pronunciation, grammar, and vocabulary. There are several in each section with more being added regularly.

 Submission #3

Score: 83/90

An ice sheet is a compressed firn which is formed from accumulated compressed buried snow with trapped air inside the ice that continues to circulate for thousands of years; the ice sheet can reach a depth of 100 m and the lower ice can appear in clear or bluish hue; however, the ice core can deteriorate if summer temperature reaches above freezing point.

Teacher Feedback:

An ice sheet is a compressed firn which is formed from accumulated [Comma] compressed buried snow with trapped air inside the ice that continues to circulate for thousands of years; the ice sheet can reach a depth of 100 m and the lower ice can appear in [a] clear or bluish hue; however, the ice core can deteriorate if [the] summer temperature reaches above [the] freezing point.

This is well written with only minor omissions indicated in the sentence above. One word of caution. Be careful of sentences that get lengthy as they can easily become run-on sentences and expose you to greater chances of making grammatical errors.

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 PTE Writing Practice: Write Essay

PTE Writing Practice Submission #1

Score: 45/90

In today’s world, Smart-phones play a significant role in our lives. The various apps available on Smart phones are indeed the key factor for reducing our intelligence levels.This essay will discuss the merits and demerits of Smart-phones and how it is affecting human intelligence.

First of all, all information can be stored in the smart -phones. This makes it incredibly easier for an Individual to make notes of important dates, key passwords and things to do. Consequently, we seldom use our memory to memorise important tasks.For instance, birthdays, key meeting notes, etc can be saved and pop up messages can be triggered on due dates. This could lead to loss of memory due to excessive dependence on Smart- phones.

Secondly, Smart-phones are embedded with spelling dictionary. Though, this enables, easy typing of messages,this could weaken the vocabulary of young students. As a result, too much dependence on such smart- phones would deter their intelligence. Additionally, Smart-phones also have in built calculator and excessive usage of such device would eventually reduce the mathematical and logical reasoning of individuals. For instance, College students may use Calculators for completion of their thesis and assignments but may suffer drastically in an exam environment.

This essay discussed various features of smart-phones and how it could affect our intelligence. In my opinion, thought Smart- phones are indeed great device to store loads of information, it is slowly decreasing our intelligence due to excessive usage.

Teacher Feedback:

In today’s world, Smart-phones [The word smartphones is one word without a hyphen and does not need to be capitalized in this sentence.] play a significant role in our lives. The various apps available on Smart phones [See above.] are [Comma] indeed [Comma] the key factor for reducing our intelligence levels.This essay will discuss the merits and demerits of Smart-phones [See above.] and how it is [The word smartphones is in the plural form. The pronoun and verb must agree; i.e., they are.] affecting human intelligence.

First of all, all information can be stored in the [Remove the definite article the.] smart -phones [See above.]. This makes it incredibly easier for an Individual to make notes of important dates, key passwords and things to do. Consequently, we seldom use our memory to memorise important tasks. [Leave one space after a full stop.] For instance, birthdays, key meeting notes, [Only one space after a comma.] etc [A period and comma are needed after the word etc.] can be saved and pop up messages can be triggered on due dates. This could lead to loss of memory due to excessive dependence on Smart- phones [See above.].

While the final sentence in the introduction says that it will “discuss the merits and demerits of Smart-phones”, the paragraphs 1 and 2 only speak of the demerits. There is no argument in favor of smartphones and how they might enhance human intelligence. This defeats the purpose of an argumentative essay which is to present both sides.

Corrections are offered in the first two paragraphs. Many of the errors may have been detected with a quick edit before submitting. Punctuation and subject verb agreement were among the errors.

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PTE Writing Practice Submission #2

Score: 64/90

With the rise of urbanization and populations growing across the world, evaluation of teachers on the website has become the subject of heated debate. while it is possible to claim that supporting for evaluating educators provides various benefits such as improving a quality of studying plans and materials, others maintain that the side effects of grading teachers outweigh the advantages. This essay will discuss that this measurement might bring a positive outcome to society.

There are several reasons why the evaluation of teachers on the websites can have a positive impact on both students and educators. Take the evaluating teachers on university websites for example, teachers can have feedback regarding their curriculum and then they may develop the way to educate students. By doing this, the well-structured studying plans and a quality of academic resources can be provided, which leads to benefits in society.

On the other hand, it is often argued that grading teachers is unnecessary. First and foremost, misleading of teacher’s reputations could be a significant factor to be considered. Proponents of this argument assert that teachers may be discouraged by the grading system and perhaps academic productivity can be reduced for students.

In conclusion, considering what has been discussed above, while a negative outcome can be created, it would be wise to say that evaluation of teachers by students is beneficial for both. Without a doubt, this measure is also advantageous to society and education system as a whole.

Teacher Feedback:

Your arguments are clear and your essay’s structure is logical.

Grammar/Expression:

while it is possible to claim that supporting for evaluating educators provides various benefits…(should be >>) While it is possible to claim that support for evaluating educators provides various benefits…

Without a doubt, this measure is also advantageous to society and education system as a whole. (should be >>)Without a doubt, this measure is also advantageous the education system and society as a whole.

Make sure to check your work before submission:

…debate. while…(should be >>) …debate. While…

Make sure that you look at the e2language.com core skills videos – https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCfV4dbtV-ZnyqSrKc6zbDtg

You’ll see videos on pronunciation, grammar and vocabulary. There are several in each section with more being added regularly.

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PTE Writing Practice Submission #3

Score: 83/90

These days with the number of phone applications and digital photo software, images of models can be edited to look unrealistically perfect. These images could have negative consequences to those that view them. Therefore, this essay will discuss whether or not the media should include more normal looking people in their advertisements.

The inclusion of average looking people in advertisements would reduce the insecurities feelings customers could have. Customers would not feel inferior and have advertised images that they can relate to. For example, Boo, a women’s clothing brand has ditched supermodels for larger looking women to advertise their clothing. Therefore, this has reduced the inferiority complex feelings that women can have once they see an advertisement with as supermodel.

On the other hand, media should be able to choose whom they desire to be on their advertisement. The media should not be concerned about what people’s opinions and feelings are towards photoshopped supermodels. They should do what is best for their business and not try please everyone. For instance, some fashion brands only hire a specific type of women to advertise their clothing because it fits within their business model. Hence, the media should be able to put up advertisements of whoever they want.

In conclusion, this essay has discussed whether or not more normal people should be included in advertisements. The essay has looked at two main points, the inclusion of average looking people to reduce insecurities and that the media should choose who they want at their own discretion. In my opinion, I believe media should include more average looking, people because it reduces insecurities some people might feel.

Teacher Feedback:

These days with the number of phone applications and digital photo software (software is an uncountable noun, so be careful when combining both uncountable and countable nouns with ‘number of’. It would be better to say ‘the number of phone applications and the amount of digital photo software…’)

These images could have negative consequences to (consequences on or for, not to. Also consider ‘impact on’)

…Therefore, this essay will discuss whether or not the media should include more normal(-)looking people in their advertisements.

The inclusion of average looking people in advertisements would reduce the insecurities feelings (“feelings of insecurity”) customers could have. Customers would not feel inferior and (would) have advertised images that they can relate to. …this has reduced the inferiority complex feelings (feelings of inferiority) that women can have (may experience) once they see an advertisement with as supermodel.

On the other hand, (the) media should be able to choose whom(ever) they desire to be on their advertisement(s). The media should not be concerned about what people’s opinions and feelings are towards (P)hotoshopped supermodels. They should do what is best for their business and not try please everyone. For instance, some fashion brands only hire a specific type of wom(a)n (or ‘specific types of women’) to advertise their clothing because it fits within their business model. Hence, the media should be able to put up advertisements of who(m)ever they want.

.Very good. You write extremely well and present well thought-out arguments. Above are a number of suggested improvements to your writing.

Also, for clarity, it can help to rephrase “more normal-looking people” so that it is no ambiguity about whether you mean “more normal-looking” or “more models”. This can be achieved through “models who are more normal-looking” or “more models who are normal-looking”.

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Did you see your own level of writing in any of these PTE writing practice samples? 

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More PTE Writing Practice

PTE Writing live classes for paid members are on Tuesdays at 8pm AEST (Melbourne time).

Make sure you practice your tasks from the website, submit an assessment for feedback, discuss writing in your tutorials and attend the live classes! Check out our free PTE writing sample essay, too!

Each improvement in your PTE writing practice will add points value to your test score so it is important to act on the teacher’s feedback.

Good luck and write well!

Written by David Williamson